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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:48 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376133) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:57 AM Author: crusty cruise ship "C was seen driving in the X area, with D as a passenger, by both A and B."
(no one gives a fuck whether A and B were driving or doing a standing 69 at the time they saw these faggots) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM Author: onyx nudist step-uncle's house stain they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a role potentially. Better to keep it clean.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:10 PM Author: beta psychic Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, just that they passed them. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377665) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:40 PM Author: Exciting mad cow disease stage As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42386999) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:42 PM Author: Motley fantasy-prone puppy market Subject: Quick fixxx As A and B were driving in X, they passed a car driven by C containing D as a passenger.
EDIT: LMAO at the date |
Date: April 30th, 2021 9:52 AM Author: nighttime resort yarmulke “As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C. D was a passenger in C’s car at the time.”
Would break up the sentences. Your original sentence isn’t terrible though. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:53 AM Author: Idiotic Aggressive Alpha (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376148) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts emphasis on "D was a passenger in C’s car at this time" -- which is a minor detail.
it doesn't really matter whether C or D is the driver. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:56 AM Author: nighttime resort yarmulke Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main person. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376166) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "C's car" for clarity (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376201) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:51 AM Author: crusty cruise ship "at this time"
ROFL |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:54 AM Author: onyx nudist step-uncle's house stain Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually driving. Or were they in two separate cars, both of which passed C. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376155) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: nighttime resort yarmulke Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/c I didn’t know what the surrounding sentences are like. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376160) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:04 AM Author: onyx nudist step-uncle's house stain You can do it in another sentence, but it's going to be important to be clear who was driving in the passing car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376205) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: Light Bossy Lettuce While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car that C was driving with a passenger, D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376157) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:57 AM Author: Honey-headed Jap (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376168) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:58 AM Author: lascivious keepsake machete goyim As A and B were driving separately in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit This suggestion isn't meant to be used word for word, just generally to give you the right idea on how to handle this sort of thing, please develop as part of an exercise in your own development as a lawyer. Really need to break this into clauses that explain everything.
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.
WHEREAS A, B, C, and D are human persons domiciled in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS X is a certain area in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS A, B, and C are legally authorized to operate motor vehicles ("cars" and each individual such vehicle a "car")
WHEREAS on that certain date, A, B, and C were operating cars.
WHEREAS on that certain date, D was a passenger in the car operated by C.
Now, therefore be it resolved, on that certain date, the aforementioned cars traversed on intersecting paths in Area X.
[I assume by "passed" you mean "passed" as in "they passed by each other while headed in different directions," revise if you mean they were going the same way and A/B's cars passed/overtook C's car.]
Please handle and recirculate, thanks. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376203) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM Author: brilliant bisexual macaca (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376392) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:08 AM Author: Charismatic Factory Reset Button (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376526) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:25 AM Author: cream space halford (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376657) |
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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:40 PM Author: Umber theatre Very clear, no ambiguity, reads like 1st order logic, I like it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44453959) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: electric yapping nursing home As A and B entered the X area, they looked at each other, and although none of them said a word, they understood each other perfectly. It was X area after all. Are there any Xs around, they wondered? They passed a beaten-up vehicle with ridiculous oversized chromed wheels with C as a driver and D as a passenger. X's! - thought A and B. C and D did not think anything. They were high. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376178) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:36 AM Author: Stubborn circlehead pozpig (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376332) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: Maize trip rehab coffee pot (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376340) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Odious Frozen Plaza Pistol FRIENDLESS FAGGOT BIRDSHIT A was driving some FAGgOt BIRdshit car alone(some other NIFmGGA was drivomg alone in another car) they passed ALPHA TURD C , who has MANY DRINKING BUDDIES, SO NATURALLY HAD A PASSENGER (most likely an AZNgirl getting wet for MAMMOTH TURDCOCK) (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376183) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: Mind-boggling bistre house (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376187) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376195) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: Embarrassed to the bone thirsty roast beef marketing idea (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376249) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM Author: glittery wagecucks friendly grandma (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376406) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:36 AM Author: aromatic ape gaming laptop (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376713) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:32 PM Author: clear at-the-ready stead half-breed (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377057) |
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Date: May 1st, 2021 12:19 AM Author: Mind-boggling bistre house (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42380818) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Mind-boggling bistre house As A and B were sucking each other’s cocks in the XXX area, C drove by with D cumming in his ass. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376184) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: Idiotic Aggressive Alpha i think you nailed it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376191) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM Author: Lime swashbuckling internal respiration (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42378174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: Idiotic Aggressive Alpha i hope everyone appreciates the mental illness being performed right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376189) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:28 AM Author: 180 deep pocket flask meetinghouse (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376669) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: diverse cumskin shrine A and B passed D and C, who was driving. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376194) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: Adventurous saffron stage (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376341) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:52 AM Author: crusty cruise ship sounds like a riddle (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376816) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: crawly razzmatazz queen of the night i hate this crap
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D driving with C. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike i wish this works and it sounds nice but it seems slightly off (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376206) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: crawly razzmatazz queen of the night As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D (who was driving with C).
This is it |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:07 AM Author: marvelous mentally impaired ticket booth preventive strike doesn't it need "D's car" (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376216) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:42 AM Author: crawly razzmatazz queen of the night it says he was driving, which means an automobile.
if you think specifying what kind of automobile is a key detail then can add that |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: onyx nudist step-uncle's house stain Why do you need B, assuming A was driving. Don't say B was driving. Ever. If he wasnt.
As A was driving, they passed ... |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: Navy dingle berry you have to make it more exciting. keep the reader interested.
"Where did this take place? In X. And what happened in X? A and B were together in a car. And what did that car do? Why it passed by another car, a car driven by C. And was C alone in that second car? No, no C was not. C was with D. That's right. A and B passed C and D. It's all true." |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:08 AM Author: Tan Whorehouse Dopamine Were A and B both at the wheel? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376217) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:13 AM Author: Idiotic Aggressive Alpha turns out it was a tandem bicycle. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376233) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:20 AM Author: Adventurous saffron stage (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376607) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: Embarrassed to the bone thirsty roast beef marketing idea As some faggot and his friend were driving in the restricted area, they passed a car driven by a nigger and containing some other faggot as a passenger. Regards, I hope this helps. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376246) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:26 AM Author: Black galvanic rigor crackhouse The two cars passed in X. In one, A was driving B. In the other, C was driving D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376290) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:29 AM Author: diverse cumskin shrine star crossed lovers. reads like brokeback mountain (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376306) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:31 AM Author: Black galvanic rigor crackhouse still the best way to do it. He has more than a handful of items to hit: location, two cars, who was each driver and who was each passenger, that they passed.
This does it and leaves no uncertainty at all |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:34 AM Author: nighttime resort yarmulke (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376330) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:35 AM Author: Maize trip rehab coffee pot Okay? Wow. Hey. Picture this: Cars A and B. Right? Going through section X. *makes large "X" using forearms* And boom! Right there, they pass car C. *makes "C" using hand* A car which, at the time, was containing D *unzips pants* as a passenger. *pulls cock out of fly* Any questions? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376331) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:40 AM Author: Apoplectic Topaz Church A and B, as was their custom from time to time, were engaged in that most fanciful of modern hobbies, navigation of modern paved roads in a device propelled by an internal combustion engine, whence, they happened to pass by and through the X area. It was delightful that time of year and a welcome respite from their usual tiresome surroundings. And, as fate or chance, or even perhaps the Muses had it, another fellow engaged in the very same hobby happened by. Of course, known to them, and combustion engine navigators the State over, twas C along with D. Both were fair fellows and known to A and B. As custom would insist they happened both to notice and acknowledge each other, hobbyists in the same pursuit as they were. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376358) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:44 AM Author: Pale razzle-dazzle kitchen fanboi So, we need to talk about A driving around with B. Here's the thing: they were in X area, and what's problematic is they passed by C—yes, THAT C. C had a passenger at the time, D. Here's why that's not okay. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:49 AM Author: Carmine bonkers spot laser beams I just copied this from a brief. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376419) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:55 AM Author: pearly fat ankles mental disorder Each of A and B were driving in AREA. They both passed a car driven by C with D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376456) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM Author: Magenta contagious weed whacker point A and B passed a car driven by C, who was transporting D as a passenger, as they drove through the X area. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376505) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:07 AM Author: ebony cracking kitty cat becky two people, a & b, drove past c driving with d in his car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376517) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:13 AM Author: Vibrant shivering native C and his passenger D were traveling in X area. A overtook and passed them. B overtook and passed them too. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376555) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:19 AM Author: excitant temple antidepressant drug As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C, which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376600) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM Author: rough-skinned locale idiot Haven’t read any of the replies, so someone else may have made the same suggestion, but I’d go with:
While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car containing C (driver) and D (passenger). |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:27 AM Author: Lime swashbuckling internal respiration This was basically gromjoh's poast above except his was more concise. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376665) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:34 AM Author: Provocative hell (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376704) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:40 AM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376736) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:08 PM Author: Carmine bonkers spot laser beams (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377648) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:01 AM Author: Provocative hell (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008887) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM Author: scarlet angry death wish station writing MFE's, any resources on improving clunky writing? I recently jumped from GOV to tech (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376695) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit Did you try the hydro hack? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376699) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:41 AM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit You should drink more water, you're probably dehydrated. This will, among other things, improve cognitive function and therefore improve your writing. While you're at it also check your posture I bet you're slouching right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376746) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:17 PM Author: Tripping fear-inspiring party of the first part Just write in the active voice with short simple sentences, subject verb object. Not hard (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:16 PM Author: Tripping fear-inspiring party of the first part A and B saw C driving in X (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377381) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:28 PM Author: Poppy ceo giraffe andy and brad were driving around brooklyn when they passed carl and dave in their car.
this doesn't define who is driving and who is riding though.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:38 PM Author: Soul-stirring base sneaky criminal I am gay (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377484) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM Author: Lime swashbuckling internal respiration great thread (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42378176) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:39 PM Author: cordovan center Shitty writing is putting too much into one sentence. A and B were driving in the X area. [query: are they both driving separate cars?] C driving D passed them. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 8:29 PM Author: Navy dingle berry A and C, drivers, were in different cars, driving through area X, and with them were B and D, passengers; B was with A while D was with C; A and B passed by C and D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42379691) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:50 PM Author: Navy dingle berry (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42387061) |
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Date: May 23rd, 2021 3:44 PM Author: Navy dingle berry (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42509184) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:36 PM Author: Ruby Curious State Hissy Fit Where are we on this? Thank (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42386977) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:06 AM Author: Shaky orange famous landscape painting As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C in which D was a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008916) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:44 PM Author: crusty cruise ship OP, does this help? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44032743) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:32 AM Author: Passionate national security agency i don't think anyone reads shitlaw shitpaper so it doesn't matter. aren't state court judges borderline retarded? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722512) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:23 PM Author: Pet Relief Area (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827186) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:42 PM Author: UN peacekeeper "and containing D as" -> "in which D was", otherwise fine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827205) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 1:15 PM Author: hmmm i think weather is fraudlies Lots of helpful suggestions in this thread but I’m not sure we’ve got it figured out just yet. Let’s put a pin in it and move on. OP: what’s the next sentence? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827228) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 2:57 PM Author: Pet Relief Area (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827363) |