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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:48 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376133) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:57 AM Author: unholy startled jap sanctuary "C was seen driving in the X area, with D as a passenger, by both A and B."
(no one gives a fuck whether A and B were driving or doing a standing 69 at the time they saw these faggots) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM Author: Shaky crimson abode they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a role potentially. Better to keep it clean.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:10 PM Author: Spectacular property nowag Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, just that they passed them. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42377665) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:40 PM Author: cerebral vengeful menage As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42386999) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:42 PM Author: misunderstood misanthropic business firm half-breed Subject: Quick fixxx As A and B were driving in X, they passed a car driven by C containing D as a passenger.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:52 AM Author: cracking roast beef “As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C. D was a passenger in C’s car at the time.”
Would break up the sentences. Your original sentence isn’t terrible though. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts emphasis on "D was a passenger in C’s car at this time" -- which is a minor detail.
it doesn't really matter whether C or D is the driver. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:56 AM Author: cracking roast beef Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main person. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376166) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "C's car" for clarity (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376201) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:51 AM Author: unholy startled jap sanctuary "at this time"
ROFL |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:54 AM Author: Shaky crimson abode Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually driving. Or were they in two separate cars, both of which passed C. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376155) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: cracking roast beef Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/c I didn’t know what the surrounding sentences are like. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376160) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:04 AM Author: Shaky crimson abode You can do it in another sentence, but it's going to be important to be clear who was driving in the passing car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376205) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: Odious Medicated Stead Stock Car While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car that C was driving with a passenger, D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376157) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:57 AM Author: smoky multi-billionaire (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376168) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:58 AM Author: swashbuckling sable dingle berry university As A and B were driving separately in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Bossy theater stage This suggestion isn't meant to be used word for word, just generally to give you the right idea on how to handle this sort of thing, please develop as part of an exercise in your own development as a lawyer. Really need to break this into clauses that explain everything.
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.
WHEREAS A, B, C, and D are human persons domiciled in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS X is a certain area in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS A, B, and C are legally authorized to operate motor vehicles ("cars" and each individual such vehicle a "car")
WHEREAS on that certain date, A, B, and C were operating cars.
WHEREAS on that certain date, D was a passenger in the car operated by C.
Now, therefore be it resolved, on that certain date, the aforementioned cars traversed on intersecting paths in Area X.
[I assume by "passed" you mean "passed" as in "they passed by each other while headed in different directions," revise if you mean they were going the same way and A/B's cars passed/overtook C's car.]
Please handle and recirculate, thanks. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376203) |
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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:40 PM Author: Rusted Exciting Ratface Very clear, no ambiguity, reads like 1st order logic, I like it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#44453959) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: insane spot ladyboy A and B passed D and C, who was driving. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376194) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: Ivory vivacious stag film i hate this crap
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D driving with C. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic i wish this works and it sounds nice but it seems slightly off (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376206) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: Ivory vivacious stag film As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D (who was driving with C).
This is it |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:07 AM Author: Seedy hall psychic doesn't it need "D's car" (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376216) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:42 AM Author: Ivory vivacious stag film it says he was driving, which means an automobile.
if you think specifying what kind of automobile is a key detail then can add that |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: Shaky crimson abode Why do you need B, assuming A was driving. Don't say B was driving. Ever. If he wasnt.
As A was driving, they passed ... |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: Underhanded state digit ratio you have to make it more exciting. keep the reader interested.
"Where did this take place? In X. And what happened in X? A and B were together in a car. And what did that car do? Why it passed by another car, a car driven by C. And was C alone in that second car? No, no C was not. C was with D. That's right. A and B passed C and D. It's all true." |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:08 AM Author: fragrant reading party milk Were A and B both at the wheel? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376217) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:26 AM Author: Appetizing newt fortuitous meteor The two cars passed in X. In one, A was driving B. In the other, C was driving D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376290) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:31 AM Author: Appetizing newt fortuitous meteor still the best way to do it. He has more than a handful of items to hit: location, two cars, who was each driver and who was each passenger, that they passed.
This does it and leaves no uncertainty at all |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:55 AM Author: rough-skinned impertinent dilemma clown Each of A and B were driving in AREA. They both passed a car driven by C with D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376456) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM Author: submissive resort double fault A and B passed a car driven by C, who was transporting D as a passenger, as they drove through the X area. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376505) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:07 AM Author: balding shitlib two people, a & b, drove past c driving with d in his car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376517) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:13 AM Author: frisky provocative parlor C and his passenger D were traveling in X area. A overtook and passed them. B overtook and passed them too. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376555) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:19 AM Author: judgmental quadroon parlour As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C, which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376600) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM Author: Citrine Deranged Chapel Coldplay Fan Haven’t read any of the replies, so someone else may have made the same suggestion, but I’d go with:
While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car containing C (driver) and D (passenger). |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:41 AM Author: Bossy theater stage You should drink more water, you're probably dehydrated. This will, among other things, improve cognitive function and therefore improve your writing. While you're at it also check your posture I bet you're slouching right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42376746) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:17 PM Author: lake center coffee pot Just write in the active voice with short simple sentences, subject verb object. Not hard (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42377389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:16 PM Author: lake center coffee pot A and B saw C driving in X (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42377381) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:28 PM Author: excitant salmon location andy and brad were driving around brooklyn when they passed carl and dave in their car.
this doesn't define who is driving and who is riding though.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM Author: Sick Very Tactful Space Old Irish Cottage great thread (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42378176) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:39 PM Author: Ultramarine nighttime nursing home french chef Shitty writing is putting too much into one sentence. A and B were driving in the X area. [query: are they both driving separate cars?] C driving D passed them. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 8:29 PM Author: Underhanded state digit ratio A and C, drivers, were in different cars, driving through area X, and with them were B and D, passengers; B was with A while D was with C; A and B passed by C and D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#42379691) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:06 AM Author: shimmering fat ankles school cafeteria As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C in which D was a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#44008916) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:42 PM Author: UN peacekeeper "and containing D as" -> "in which D was", otherwise fine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#49827205) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 1:15 PM Author: tubby spastic 11yo playing in toddler section Lots of helpful suggestions in this thread but I’m not sure we’ve got it figured out just yet. Let’s put a pin in it and move on. OP: what’s the next sentence? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#49827228) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 2:57 PM Author: Pet Relief Area (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2.#49827363) |